Rachel: I loved your poem! Great job using the sunflower as a symbol of a carefree, happy person. Good job pointing out that people will tend to want to hang out with the happy person, who is fun to be around. It's very true. Maybe use a visual aid next time to give us something to look at and think about. Wonderful presentation and poem though!
Morgan H.: I love your title, "The Beginning of the End". You did a great job rhyming, so don't worry about it! Good use of nature as well. You, like Jack, used a personal experience, going to the lake, to help write your poem. I think that makes it so much more authentic. Good job! A visual would also enhance your presentation though!
Molly: I loved your powerpoint! Great job pointing out the poetic devices, alliteration, assonance, and imagery. I can tell you spent a lot of time thinking about this poem. I learned a lot, I would never have thought about. You are right on when you said crows can symbolize death. Next time, speak a little slower and louder, so everyone can hear you. Other than that, AMAZING. The powerpoint was a great visual that really made your presentation stand out!
Jack: I really liked your poem! I also liked how it was about how people lose their priorities in life and sometimes they need something to give them a hint that they have lost what's important. I like how you used something that related to you and your own experience. A visual aid might have helped but you did a great job!!!
ReplyDeleteRachel: I loved your poem! you did a great job with your word choices. I like how the sunflowers represented those special people that stand out in your life the ones who are always fun to be around and always "sunny" a visual aid would have probably been nice to help visualize what you had in your poem but you did a really amazing job!!
Morgan H: I really like your poem and thought you also did a great job with your word choices. You chose words that helped really help you visualize the seasons and what is going on during that time. You could have spoke a little louder. It looks like you put a lot of thought into it and it turned out really well!!
Jack: Loved your poem! It was very "Frost" like. I like how you used something we see every day as your inspiration. It was easy to relate to. I think your explanation for your poem was great! I think that people commonly forget what's important and your poem helped me see what is important in life! You did GREAT! :)
ReplyDeleteMorgan: I liked your poem! I liked the every day Oklahoma imagery. I would have liked to see you use a place you had been before instead of a random destination(St. Thomas) I loved your word choices! Great work Morgan!
Molly:) First off, I love your back ground color choice, it was so you! I liked the poem you chose! I like the visual pictures of the birds! I thought your thoughts about the poem were interesting about what the animal tracks represented and also the symbolism of the blue bird. Be confident when you speak in front of everyone! You did great!
Jack: Good job on your poem! You did really good! I liked these lines in your poem,
ReplyDelete"Looking for any to hear its plea,
And one lonely day it found me.
I knew not of what or why,
Until the voice began to die."
You did a good job of using creative words like, "bobbing." When you read your poem you read a little monotone, which might be something to remember next time. Other than that you did a really good job! Great poem! Go CC!
Rachel: Aww! You're poem was really cute! It reminded me of you. You did a good job on writing your poem, and it was very enjoyable to read since it was so happy go-lucky!
I thought the line, "All harmonizing in happy sunflower talk," was a cute line. Maybe next time when you read aloud your poem, look out at the audience a little more. You did a really good job writing your poem, it was darling!
Morgan: You did a really good job on your poem! I'm jealous you got to go to the lake!:) I <3 the lake. Also, I give you kudos for writing your own poem, and I think it is really hard to do that. I liked the word "pending," in the second stanza. That was a good rhyme. I thought your poem was good, and it really described Spring. I thought you covered all acts of this season. From not just the actual temperature, but to the people, the days, the plants, and insects. When you read your poem aloud, maybe next time you should read with a little more emotion. But you did a really good job!! Way to go!
Molly: Molly, you did a really good job on your poem, and your analysis! I thought you did good identifying the rhyme scheme, and noticing it was four letters. (BBBB) I liked all the pictures of the birds on your power point also! I also liked how you could pick out a sense of death in all of the parts of the poem. I felt like you owned your theory, which is good! When you read your poem, you read a little quiet and a bit too fast. Maybe read a little slower and louder next time. But, you did a really good job, and I liked your power point! GREAT job!
FIrst of all I have to say I'm loving the incorporation of text talk into the english blog! And thanks everyone for your critiques of my poem! No one hated it so I guess I succeeded in that respect! And yeah Meredith, go HHCC!!!
ReplyDeleteMolly: I liked your presentation a lot! It looks like you put a lot of effort into it and went through it many times to find the poetic terms used and the rhyme scheme which was so confusing! I also liked your pictures to go with your presentation! Your meaning section was a bit long and hard to follow for me though! Use a powerpoint more as guidelines through the main points. Good Job though!!!
Morgan H: I agree with Rachel! St. Thomas was a bit random, but besides that I liked your poem! Relating poems to personal experiences is one of the best ways to write one I think!
Rachel: I <3 your poem!!! I also like your picture that goes next to your name when you comment! Everyone likes the person who acts as themselves and follows what's important to them and not others. People who can't seem to break outside the box of setting their own goals are attracted to these kinds of people because I think thats what they really want as well. I know that you put a lot of effort into this poem unlike I did and that's something I should do next time! AMAZING JOB!!!
Jack- I like the theme of your poem! It was very creative. I think it's cool how we both used an actual experience to write our poems! Your poem was really calm and peaceful, which seems like a good way to feel after running cross country, as you had before you got the inspiration for this poem! And about your previous post about how you didn't work hard in this poem, don't say that! Writing a poem is hard and you did a good job! Rachel-I really like your poem! I love how you used a sunflower as your inspiration. It made me feel happy. I also learned some new facts about sunflowers, such as they change positions and face the sun at all times! You must have done some research to get more background information about your topic. It seems like you worked really hard on this poem and you did an awesome job! Molly- I like how you gave visual pictures of the bluebirds in your poem! I wish you would have given some of your on the spot thoughts about the poem, rather than just reading what you wrote in the PowerPoint! But I loved the presentation and you did a very good job with the PowerPoint! It looks like you worked hard to incorporate the theme of your poem into the PowerPoint! Overall Good job! Oh and sorry about all of my paragraphs being squished together, I am typing this on my iPod and I couldn't figure out how to put a space between each one, so, my bad! Good job to everyone on their presentations and thanks for critiquing my poem! :) <---that is some text language for you Jack!
ReplyDeleteJack - Your poem was really good, you are a great writer. It seemed like you really took you time on your peom and it paid off. It had a good meaning and was creative. Next time you might want to look at the poeple you are reading it to more and not just the paper. Great Job!!
ReplyDeleteRachel - Your poem was really good it was also very happy, of course. I liked how you took sunflower and compared them to how we as people are. You also gave a very good explanation of your poem and what you meant it to mean when you wrote it. Next time I think you could also look at the audience more. But Great Job!!
Morgan H - Your peom was very good, your a good writer. I loved how you wrote it and it was just like everyday things like kids playing outside and people laughing but it had a deeper meaning. I know writing a poem can be very difficult but i think you conquered it. Next time I think you should be more confident of you our work, because when you like it others will too. Great Job!!
Molly - I thought that your slide show was really good. I loved how you went deep into the meaning of the poem and gave us a couple of different ideas to go off of. Like in the beginning when you talked about the poem being a happy poem and then you went to the darker meaning of the poem. Next time I think you should talk a little louder because it was kind of hard to hear you the the other side of the room.
I'd like to start off with Kristen's poem, God's Garden. Her critique was in my opinion one of the better ones out of the group. She chose a poem with many abstract concepts that took much thought to discover the true meaning behind the words. This includes the path being the path of God and to heaven. Meaning don't stray from the path because of the devil's temptation, but stay with God and you'll be rewarded. I also like the line where it mentions gold flowers, but hidden on the flower were thorns. Meaning that the temptation is not as good as it seems. Also she mentioned a key poetic term in the poem which is the allusion to the Garden of Eden.
ReplyDeleteReiey Brown - I loved your poem about the change from summer to winter. Lying underneath was the metaphor between life and death and joy and sadness. I love how you mention how the animals play and have fun in the summer, but when winter comes along they have to go inside and the fun is over. This also portrays life always having to end as well in death. However, summer starts over again just like a new life being born and the cycle lives on.
Merideth - I loved your poem choice of the Leaf Treader. It had some very truthful metaphors about life and how people live it. You brought up the concept of leafs being experiences such as people and life choices and it really fits nicely in the poem. Also you noticed how in the last line it means that no matter how difficult the year may have been he must prepare for the next and keep moving on. This is a great message for everybody to take in.
Kayle - You did a very good job on critiquing the Lockless Door. The title of the poem gives away its own meaning of something that can't be stopped such as death. The elderly man has cheated death once before because he knows the ways that can trick him, but this time he doesn't win. He knows that death will eventually get him, but he is never ready when he finally comes. This is normal with most people in that we want to prolong life as long as possible.
Hunter - Your poem was one of the better poems in the group because it had a real life message and meaning. It showed how people want to be in control and like repetition and normalcy, but hide their emotions when something tragic or sad happens to them. You also say how we need to face these emotions and not push them away which is also very true. Finally, you mention how we let life pass by too quickly some times and don't take in and enjoy life which is common with many people.
Jack- I liked the meaning of the poem. There was good personification, alliteration, and assonance. Good job using a common point that everyone would understand. It had a good flow to it. Maybe next time have something visual. Great job!
ReplyDeleteRachel- I loved the meaning of your poem. You incorporated many interpretations. You read the poem well and had good presentation. I believed the poem was very “Rachel.” Maybe try having more eye contact with the audience. Great job!
Morgan H.- I liked the imagery and the meaning. You used something everyone can relate to. Try having more interaction with the audience. Good job!
Molly- I liked the poem you chose. You were able to pull two very different meanings out of this poem. I liked that you got all the little details in the poem. Next time try to have more contact and interaction with the audience. You did great!